Step 17: Your Close

asfasdf At this point, you are almost there. Most people are not going to take that last step towards liberating themselves from tinnitus. Those of us who have, have wound up deeply grateful that we had tinnitus, that it came into our lives, because it literally forced us to resolve the deep issues and habits that were literally killing us and locking us into excruciating pain. Right now, you can stay where you are, clueless about your next steps and confused about where to go, losing sleep and riddled with anxiety over tinnitus. Or, you can choose to walk the path of liberation from tinnitus. If friends or family ask you “how’s your tinnitus?” (Which is a question I hate, especially if I’m in a good mood or not aware of it), you’ll be able to say “I’m liberating myself from it, thank you.” If they dig, you can say “I’ve joined a community where people who’ve already healed themselves of tinnitus help those who’d like to do the same, and it’s really great.” That ought to get them off your back so you can concentrate on healing!

On the other side, if you choose to join us, are advantages like:

* Nights of sweet sleep
* More centered and harmonious relationships
* Taking care of yourself
* Loving yourself deeply
* Resolving past trauma
* Soothing body work
* The right information for XYZ (should I list the “features/benefits” again?
* And well…the program we’ve designed just simply FEELS GOOD!

And that, should really be your ultimate guide: If it feels good to make this choice and get started on your road to healing, then

[Buy Now]

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The path of liberation begins with the burning desire to heal oneself, and ends with…

Our world-changing and painfully obvious breakthrough is that we study healing, health, and what works…we focus on learning from those who’ve already healed themselves, and that is the information we extract from research institutions, who know a hell of a lot about what’s wrong and very little about what helps.

It just makes sense to act now and start learning from those who’ve healed themselves and finally tell your whining bitching and moaning tinnitus support group, your clueless “there’s nothing you can do” medical practitioners, and the rest of the “tinnitus-makers” in your life to FUCK OFF.

…and break through the misconception that there’s nothing you can do. By now, you know there’s lots you can do, and people who say otherwise are either clueless or malicious.

It’s time to stop pussy-footing around and figure out how to neutralize/harmonize the factors in your life that are causing your tinnitus.

…and figure out how to confront the people in your life who have a vested interest in keeping you sick.

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KevinR
Post subject: Re: Step 17: My Close
Post Posted: Thu Nov 05, 2009 7:43 am
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Good stuff. Some of it could be eliminated though. It’s a natural tendency to go dramatic on the close ( I know I do), it IS a closing scene, after all.

I’ve learned to judge my own closes on how loudly I can hear the music swell as I’m reading it back. You’re a composer, so this should work well for you.

You might reconsider this part: “If friends or family ask you “how’s your tinnitus?” (Which is a question I hate, especially if I’m in a good mood or not aware of it), you’ll be able to say “I’m liberating myself from it, thank you.” If they dig, you can say “I’ve joined a community where people who’ve already healed themselves of tinnitus help those who’d like to do the same, and it’s really great.” That ought to get them off your back so you can concentrate on healing!”

Telling someone the conversation they’ll have about their decision to buy can be risky. They’ll fill in the gaps, you don’t want that. Better to just stick to the straight benefits. So, yes I would summarize them in the bullet list.

Also, you have the word “literally” twice in one paragraph.

Overall, this is excellent, like all your work.

Congrats on being the first to complete!

Kevin

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Post subject: Re: Step 17: My Close
Post Posted: Wed Nov 18, 2009 5:17 am
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OK, what do you think of using our tagline to replace the buy now button.

Basically it would something like:

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YES, I want to liberate myself from tinnitus and want to start right away…

Button text options:
[I choose liberation from tinnitus]
[I claim well being over tinnitus]
[From Tinnitus to Liberation]

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YES, I fully understand that each person’s results and journey will be different. As I’ve just learned, some people released their tinnitus when they completely mourned the loss of a loved one. Others released their tinnitus, when they accepted their life path or just stopped pushing themselves so hard.

YES, I dedicate myself to discovering “what it is” for me, and

YES, I know that relief is just around the corner, I want to liberate myself from tinnitus and I’m eager to start right away…

Button text options:
[I choose liberation from tinnitus]
[I claim well being over tinnitus]
[From Tinnitus to Liberation]
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Another “closing” option: Go from tinnitus to liberation by pressing the “I choose LIBERATION from tinnitus” button below

[I choose LIBERATION from tinnitus]

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Thoughts: path, road, choice…what works best?

on the path of liberation from tinnitus
on the road of liberation from tinnitus

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Honestly, any of what you have here should work fine. Test different buttons if you like. If you’re concerned about skimmers than I’d go with “liberation over tinnitus” but this is not a skimming type letter. You have a VERY captive audience.

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  1. admin says:

    I wish/desire/honestly … I have a phrase from my videos… I think it’s OK…look it up…

    —We need to figure out the call to action and the way that they buy. I’d love it if it were a PayPal button, but not a lot of these folks even know what that is…

    Do they call me, do I do a standard contract the way folks do here?

    I have one from my translation stuff.

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